Break down the sentences into manageable chunks. Sex vedio Yours Truly. J.A.G«1» And when you brought up Mendy’s new boyfriend who stole everything from her, I had to re-read it to get the wording correct. From what I read I would give it a 7.6 out of 10. Ken Doesn’t have a job? Keep writing.Ghostrider939Report 2012-09-30 21:21:41Main problem, Hank, is HUGE sentences. From what I read I would give it a 7.6 out of 10. Keep going at it, just try and edit the background of the story as well as the way you word your words. Break down the sentences into manageable chunks. Ken Doesn’t have a job? And when you brought up Mendy’s new boyfriend who stole everything from her, I had to re-read it to get the wording correct. It’s also odd how you forget apostrophes for words like her’s. It’s also odd how you forget apostrophes for words like her’s. It’s also odd how you forget apostrophes for words like her’s. It’s also odd how you forget apostrophes for words like her’s. J.A.G«1» Yours Truly. J.A.G«1» Keep writing.Ghostrider939Report 2012-09-30 21:21:41Main problem, Hank, is HUGE sentences. From what I read I would give it a 7.6 out of 10. Let’s Start with the intro, so Ken is two years younger than Mendy who is 20, therefore Ken is 18 but still lives at home and Mendy helps him at times?
