and lastly, and I got this on my own story as a comment, read your own story out loud to catch some of the mistakes. How did they meet? xxx sex first, some background. And why are they attracted to each other. where did they know Sarah from? sweet but tangy” basicly, use all your scenses. Who are the characters? How did they meet? Where do they live? 🙂 now… How did they meet? Where do they live? 7 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-17 01:11:29Very good I must say!anonymous readerReport 2012-06-13 08:48:10Did you ever hear of the six questions that a newspaper article should answer – who, what, where, when, how and why? 7 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-17 01:11:29Very good I must say!anonymous readerReport 2012-06-13 08:48:10Did you ever hear of the six questions that a newspaper article should answer – who, what, where, when, how and why? Doing so adds to the atmosphere, adds background and detail that makes a story interesting and not just a clinical description of some random people having sex.anonymous readerReport 2012-06-13 04:55:08not a bad story. When does this story take place? go write the second part, I am dying to read about the two girls in the hotel roomdosukinuta03Report 2012-06-12 23:38:22seriously, what the fuck was that shit?«12» Doing so adds to the atmosphere, adds background and detail that makes a story interesting and not just a clinical description of some random people having sex.anonymous readerReport 2012-06-13 04:55:08not a bad story.
