I am sure it is not English. Xxx vedio 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 12:57:58Spell checker would definitly help also checking grammaranonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 09:17:22I’m sure I would have liked your story if I could read it. I was forced to rate your story a ZERO!anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 07:26:44As everyone else is saying grammer and spelling however I like the story and was able to keep track right to the end, now I’m hoping you continue this as there are many different ways you could take this, could even be made into a short novel. I am sure it is not English. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 12:57:58Spell checker would definitly help also checking grammaranonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 09:17:22I’m sure I would have liked your story if I could read it. I am sure it is not English. I was forced to rate your story a ZERO!anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 07:26:44As everyone else is saying grammer and spelling however I like the story and was able to keep track right to the end, now I’m hoping you continue this as there are many different ways you could take this, could even be made into a short novel. Learn to spell, use a spell checker or write in your native language.
