There are many more errors, as well, but the worst offense is inconsideration of your reader who must struggle through your story. xxx sex Just need more practice, I suppose.SwingerReport 2009-09-03 15:53:36Story horny but paragraphs needed. But, you are a very talented writer. Would like to hear further adventures. Or are you now over them? Or are you now over them? This is a story worth telling, and there are lots of interesting parts to it. There are many more errors, as well, but the worst offense is inconsideration of your reader who must struggle through your story. Or are you now over them? Would like to hear further adventures. They ALL need work.«1» The only story I ever wrote came out stupidly because every five minutes I’d have to stop and relieve myself. Would like to hear further adventures. 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2011-04-23 09:29:18Pretty poor writing with horrible grammar, spelling, and syntax, and a lack of sentence structure and any semblance of paragraphs, proper punctuation and dialog. Work on your grammar, sentence structure, and plot. The only story I ever wrote came out stupidly because every five minutes I’d have to stop and relieve myself. The only story I ever wrote came out stupidly because every five minutes I’d have to stop and relieve myself.
