they could both be posted as one chapter and need to be two or three times longer.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-10 01:11:12Is their going to be a part three«1234» delete both stories and rewrite them properly. give back your high school diploma ( if you ever got one ) you don’t deserve it.anonymous readerReport 2013-07-19 21:40:31since you were taught to speak and write in german WHY THE HELL ARE YOU POSTING IN ENGLISH? xxx sex WHERES ALL THE BACKGROUND?? give back your high school diploma ( if you ever got one ) you don’t deserve it.anonymous readerReport 2013-07-19 21:40:31since you were taught to speak and write in german WHY THE HELL ARE YOU POSTING IN ENGLISH? they could both be posted as one chapter and need to be two or three times longer.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-10 01:11:12Is their going to be a part three«1234» these two chapters are nothing more than a story OUTLINE it is not a POSTABLE STORY. 18 comments«1234»Anonymous readerReport 2016-03-21 14:09:50It was a good start but you really need to finish the story before you submit it.Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-26 18:50:27another crappy chapter that FAILS to give proper background or character development. delete both stories and rewrite them properly. these two chapters are nothing more than a story OUTLINE it is not a POSTABLE STORY. WHERES ALL THE BACKGROUND??
